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To get your message across, don't be CLEVER
Published about 2 months ago • 5 min read
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Company holiday parties. Ex-colleague reunions. Dad's game night. Mom's night out.
'Tis the networking season. Perfect time to practice your business intro. Or mess it up spectacularly (me in previous years).
I just finished reading Donald Miller's Building A Story Brand 2.0, and one thing fired me up: the importance of reducing cognitive load in our message.
Here's what that means: If the people we're talking to need to burn excessive brain calories to understand what we said, we lost them.
Here's leadership coach example from the book:
Clever, but unclear: Inhale knowledge, exhale success (what is he selling?)Here's a clearer rewrite: Helping you become everyone's favorite leader
This hit close to home. One of my pet peeves is messages that are "clever" but not "clear." And yet the temptation to sound clever is so great that I can be my own worst nightmare.
Another example, this time personal. Just a few weeks back, I tried to rename my newsletter using my gamer tag "Soonami." I thought it was clever. To everybody else? It was not clear at all. Sigh.
But here's what I learned: Once you recognize the difference between clever and clear, you can't unsee it. Now I catch myself steering my clients toward clarity and not let them wander into "clever" territory.
❌ When your intro is clever but unclear, people can't connect their problem to your solution. You blend into the noise of a hundred other conversations. You can’t break free from being invisible.
✅ When your intro is clear and easily digestible, people remember you. They understand what you do. They know exactly when to refer you or reach out. You become the person they think of when the need arises.
Here are a couple of business introductions that nailed the "clear over clever" rule:
Example 1:
"I'm all about the home. I'm a real estate agent and I also help with sourcing and fabrication of quartz countertops."
👉 Why this works: "Home" and "Countertops" are very concrete words that you can easily picture. There is little guessing needed here. You immediately know this person helps with two specific home-related needs.
Example 2:
"Tired of living with Mom? Call Tom." (Real estate agent introducing himself)
👉 Why this works: Speaks directly to a specific pain point with instant recall. The rhyming of mom and Tom made this sticky.
Example 3:
"87% of the people never live in their dream home. I help you find your dream home."
👉 Why this works: The specificity of the statistics and the desirable benefit made this memorable.
Example 4: Donald Miller's own sound bite for his StoryBrand product:
"Sometimes business leaders have great ideas and great products, but they don't know how to talk about them to get people to pay attention. When they can't come up with the sound bites they need to get their ideas across, they call me. I help business leaders come up with the sound bites they need to sell more products or get more votes."
👉 Why this works: You hear the problem (can't talk about their ideas effectively), understand who it's for (business leaders), and know the exact outcome (sell more, get more votes), all packaged up in really plain English.
Notice what all these have in common? Low cognitive load. You don't have to work to understand them.
And if I can be brave and share...
Here's my working copy that I'm testing out this month:
"Some speakers are constantly starting over with their email list because they don't have a simple email system that nurtures leads between gigs. All the while, warm leads cool off and opportunities slip away. I help speakers bridge the stage to their audience by turning applause into leads."
Still in beta testing but it's better than my previous versions.
The goal isn't to be the most clever person in the room. The goal is to be so clear that it’s easy to remember.
Here’s why I think this is important:
Your introduction at networking events is your first—and sometimes only—chance to be remembered. If people have to work too hard to understand what you do, you've lost the opportunity before it even begins.
If you're a coach or speaker wanting to turn networking conversations into future clients, think about:
Make it specific enough to be memorable. Vague intros ("I help people live their best life") get forgotten. Specific ones ("I help empty nesters figure out what's next after the kids move out") stick.
Test your current intro for cognitive load. Say it out loud. If you have to explain what you mean after saying it, it may be too clever and not clear enough.
Practice until it feels natural. Stop rambling and don't wing it. Know what you're going to say before you say it.
Keep refining your sound bites until you get the reactions you want (i.e. people asking "How do I work with you?").
When you have a version you're happy with, repeat it until people have it memorized and can repeat it back to you.
I'd love to hear your working intro! Hit reply and share what you're testing out this holiday season. I read and respond to every email.
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Positive Peer-Pressure
Speaking of networking events—I'm proud to share that I've pretty much given up on alcoholic drinks this year, except for one cocktail at hubby's birthday dinner.
I credit my friend Sally Magee for having this positive influence on me.
Sally and me at the Connect Learn Share 2025 event in Denver
Sally is a Gallup-Certified Strengths Coach who helps people get unstuck from their drinking patterns. Her newsletter "Inspiration to Reach New Heights" is for high-achieving women who are exploring a healthier relationship with alcohol or pursuing an alcohol-free lifestyle.
I help coaches and speakers turn applause into leads. Email marketer | CliftonStrengths Coach | IT project management.
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Every week, I share one tip to help coaches and speakers go from invisible to in-demand. Learn how to capture leads and stay connected. ⏳️All it takes is 5 minutes.